Revising your persuasive essay

This is an excellent piece of writing which uses structure and language to meet the purpose and have the desired impact on the audience. The writer uses a mixture of devices to make the piece interesting and different. The use of the second person is effective.
In order to improve the writer needs to think about structure, in particular the ending. It is preferable to make the beginning and the ending link in some way. Here the writer could have mentioned the gap between the rich and the poor.
An excellent and enjoyable piece of writing though.
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Revising your persuasive essay

revising your persuasive essay

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